February 12, 2007
my story outline
Characters:
- Jaun and Jorge Diaz are twin brothers age 16.
- Angela is a doctor that Juan Meets at war
- Rose Diaz the twins mother
Exposition:
- The Diaz family lives poor.
- Jorge is sent to war, but was diagnosed with cancer.
- Juan secretly goes in his place.
Rising Action:
- Juan goes to war and is killed.
Climax:
- Rose receives a message from Angela telling her that Juan was killed at war.
- Angela discusses private things that can easily be read by authorities
- Authorities take action and put Jorge and Rose in Jail until they can pay for the fine.
Falling Action:
- Angela bails them out of jail
Resolution:
- The mexicans win the battle against Spain
- Rose moves to Ecuador to start a new life
Internal Conflict:
- The diaz family knows they are disobeying the government, but feel that they have to try and save Joge's life.
External Conflict:
- Its against the law to send another familymember in the place of the one that was recruited for war.
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4 comments:
Hey Roro!! This seems interesting. But ummm....what's with the name Rose-a-shy? Anyway it's your paper. You gotta add your exposition, climax, rising action, exposition, falling action, resolution, internal conflict and external conflict. So get to work! LOL! (I DID THE SAME THING AS YOU ON MY FIRST DRAFT BUT BERT TOLD ME I DID IT WRONG)
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YOU SHOULD KNOW WHO THIS IS IT'S YOUR FRIEND I DON'T WANNA GIVE ANY INFO ON MYSELF SO BYE BYE I'LL TALK TO YOU LATER
hey this is marissa,
well first of all that is not how you spell horehey. why would the mother want to send the twin brother away and not the other. i think that angela needs to be more involved. the sentence " the telegraph see's the message and takes immediate action..." doesn't make scence. how does the mother react to the death of her son? go into more depth.
hey this is marissa,
well first of all that is not how you spell horehey. why would the mother want to send the twin brother away and not the other. i think that angela needs to be more involved. the sentence " the telegraph see's the message and takes immediate action..." doesn't make scence. how does the mother react to the death of her son? go into more depth.
hey, the story was SOOOO much clearer now that I've read your outline. Like I said before: add more detail in the beggining so that readers can understadn things better, but other than that, good job.
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